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That’s a great first scene for introducing Poison Ivy. I’m really looking forward to seeing this when it’s done, it looks charming and fun and just campy enough.
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Yeah, I’m sure it sticks out. The alternative was having a random person comically fly across them as Freeze backs away. I tried a few different options and this seemed like an ok attempt. Do you think it works or is it too jarring?Very impressive audio work -- wow!
Did you add a bit of slo-mo when Freeze pulls the necklace off of Ivy?
Nice! Thank you!exceptional work!
And for me, the slo-mo was truly not a problem.
No, it does not stick out. It is actually quite subtle.Yeah, I’m sure it sticks out. The alternative was having a random person comically fly across them as Freeze backs away. I tried a few different options and this seemed like an ok attempt. Do you think it works or is it too jarring?
Remarkable job! Just a few comments:
- While it certainly beats the alternative (the gorilla suit), I feel that there are too many shots in a row of the crowd (and B & R) looking at Ivy offscreen. In a better made movie, those would be intercut with some inserts of her that still held the reveal for later (things like a shadowy silhouette, a closeup of her lips blowing the poison, and such), which of course don't exist. I'd suggest cutting from B & R smelling the poison at 1:47 directly to the Ivy reveal, losing two shots of the crowd in between for better pacing. But, of course, that might totally ruin the music, which might not work at all if this is done.
- I feel there's a bit of audio drop after Freeze's line "Hand over the diamond". The transition is well done, but one gets the feel that the entire soundscape in the background changes at that spot (if what I'm saying even makes any sense). Some additional background audio there might help disguise it.
- The slo-mo shot does not bother me by itself, but since it's done with the (abysmal) internal Vegas slow down option, the movements are jerky. I'd recommend trying Twixtor for much smoother results (if you need help with this, shoot me a PM).
I got so excited having a recommendation that I only mentioned the slowmo shot. I forgot to mention when I watched that clip, to me that shot was the only thing that stood out. I know the original film so I can see where the visual cuts are and they're really clever. Pacing broadly feels good to me. I don't miss anything that's gone.- I checked out @addiesin's recommendation for the free program and that seems to have smoothed it out much better than Vegas. I'm not going to stress too much for a less than a second cutaway, but this program seems to have done the trick for this minor issue.
Thanks man! This edit has definitely rejuvenated something inside of me.I got so excited having a recommendation that I only mentioned the slowmo shot. I forgot to mention when I watched that clip, to me that shot was the only thing that stood out. I know the original film so I can see where the visual cuts are and they're really clever. Pacing broadly feels good to me. I don't miss anything that's gone.
Black and white looks good too. Not too contrasty, I can tell what I'm looking at.
He got his start playing a doctor on the show E.R. for a long time. You might find something there, even if you have to replace the pronouns from "you" to "I" or something. There are probably episode transcriptions you can CTRL+F "family" search through. And iMDB has quotes, though that's not super thorough or accurate usually.If anyone knows of ANY quotes that resemble George Clooney saying "I don't want to lose my family" that would be MUCH appreciated. I tried looking around and couldn't find much. There were some ok quotes from The Descendants, but I didn't find anything useable unless I missed something.
Something I noticed in your last clip: it felt like the freeze gun was oddly emphasized, with Batman disarming Freeze and Freeze commanding his henchmen to retrieve the gun, when the gun never gets used in the scene. I went back and watched the original and I see Freeze does use the gun before getting disarmed, but I see why you cut it - the terrible line “alright everyone, chill... chill... chill.” Is it possible to keep him using the gun but remove his dialogue? In particular the shots where he repeats the word “chill.” I bet you could loop the freeze gun noise over those shots and you wouldn’t notice his mouth move at all.