Canon Editor said:
I like the first clip. The two closeups of Windu’s face are very quick and should either be truncated completely or lengthened, especially the first one.
The second clip works too. I like the added score. It gives an gravitas much needed. Nonetheless, I feel that in both the second and third clip the lighting of the fan film is too different from the one of Episode I… some more colour tweaking might be needed.
The third clip is probably the one that needs the most work, as Yoda’s reaction is almost unnoticeable, whereas the audio and video cuts should keep the pacing up a bit more.
Thank you for your feedback, brother. It will definitely come in handy.
I do agree that the Windu reaction shots might be a tad to short, I'll see what can be done. There wasn't much to work with from the onset, but I'll find a way.
Well, as far as the lightning in the fanfilm goes, I completely understand your concerns. As of right now I think all of us has come up with solutions that have made it far better, but there is absolutely room to try and improve it even more. I'll see what can be done. I have an idea already, which is to color grade the nighttime scenery into a subtly more Naboo-like green, as to create some more resemblence.
I do see your point. Someone else stated this on the previous page and I forgot to respond that; yes, it does indeed cut away a little to soon. This was because in the original footage Yoda is looking towards a person, but a little tweaking of the eyes and maybe I can make him look down instead and keep it at a greater length. If not, I'll just cut it after he opens his eyes or something.
Thank you for your support, feedback and ideas as always!
The Scribbling Man said:
I was thinking you could maybe split one of the longer clips in two?
Why didn't I think of that. Always overthinking stuff on these edits, man. Good call!
The Scribbling Man said:
Thanks for being so open to feedback btw. I know an edit like this must be one heck of a headache! Make sure you celebrate well once it's finished
Glad you like that! I'll always be open to feedback. I seriously make this edit just as much for you guys as for me, so if i don't listen I will surely disappoint myself. I know that in the end I have the last say because it is my edit, but finding a great middle-way or beyond will only compliment the end product.
Headache, heartache, diarrhea... you name it.
Canon Editor said:
Sorry, I just got around to watch the other two updates. Both are good. There are two things I would work on, the firt you surely know already. In the council scene, the audio transition from “Across the Stars” to the other theme is almost there but not smooth enough.
More importantly, I believe, in the senate scene, having the cut from Palpatine and Amidala’s shot to the establishing shot of Naboo happen while Palpatine is _beginning_ to move away from Queen Amidala is distracting to a careful eye. Make the cut a fraction earlier and it will work! Keep up the wonderful, wonderful, wonderful work!
Hey, Canon! Thanks for your feedback, brother!
- I am aware some audio transitions might feel a tad to short in these unfinished previews, but AtS soundtrack I actually thought worked transitioning into the other one. However, since this was not the case for you I can definitely smoothen it out a little. I think your problem might be audio levels changing? That is the only red flag i get when i listen closely. I'll see what i can do, cheers!
- I agree. Didn't even notice that myself before now. I should cut to the establishing shot just a tad quicker. Will be done.
You flatter me, my friend! Thank you and will do!
Nic said:
Andreas said:
- As of distrusing Qui-Gon, I kind of disagree. I think he distrusts the situation that Qui-Gon presents (...)
- I'm not sure if i understand this point. You think the transition doesn't work? Or the fact that you don't see the Sidious/Maul scene? Because it is in the movie, I just haven't included it in the preview.
Sorry if I was unclear in my critiques. What I meant was, since you're both crafting new scenes and a new context that frame those scenes, we won't really know how well they work until a total work print is made available.
As for the new clips, I like the extra addition of Valorum, though now I think the fan film footage is too dark, and may require fotage of droids knocking down trees to better sell the planet as Naboo. The scene of Yoda and Windu sending the Jedi on their mission is great, but there needs to be a more "Star Warsy" transition from the temple to outer space.
Absolutely no worries.
This is indeed true. That is why there will be previews of the full product before release for a selected two or three people, due to the massive overhaul of the movie. Your concerns are valid, and I do indeed see your point. In the end it will be you guy's opinions that matter, and I can only hope my ideas and execution has transfered well and that it is a product narratively and tonally superior to the original.
- You just love giving me work, huh? Droids cutting down trees? Oh my! Well, I won't be able to pull most of that of with the fan footage. But if people - and I will need some people - think this is necessary to sell that it is Naboo, I can create a second establishing shot after the Naboo Planet one. Show some forest, with some battle ships in the distance and some engine sounds. I could also, for simplicity, just add a couple of engine sounds and falling trees in the distance during the fanfilm-duel footage to sell that Naboo is still being overrun by the powers of the Federation. Have in mind that we've seen the planet of Naboo about 3-4 times before the second act in which these scenes take place, so it should be familiar to the audience.
So, here's a vote:
a) It is not really necessary. We've seen the planet of Naboo many times up to this point, and I buy that it is Naboo.
b) Kind of going with a), but maybe add (subtly) some engine sounds in the distance and some falling trees.
c) Create a second establishing shot in the Naboo forest, with some Trade Federation-y things going on in the distance.
I, personally, don't feel like I need this. Having seen Naboo so many times during the first act, the very earth-like blue atmosphere and the rain forests, I think the audience will understand that it is Naboo. But - if many people don't feel that way, I am definitely open for adding b) or c) to the current scenes.
- As for the transition I completely see where you're coming from. I like cuts, and I'm not actually overly fan of the wipes (i know, shoot me SW fans!), so I only keep a couple that I feel serve the imagery or the tone of a scene. And this paticular cut i felt fit due to the increasing tension of the situation. I can go ahead and try a wipe into space to smoothen the transition out. I think it could work well.
Thank you, brother!
CourtlyHades296 said:
I'd like for the Throne Room reprise to appear in the Episode 3 edit's credits.
I'm not following you...