The Gill-man: Silent Jaws Edition

[The Scribbling Man]

Just sat down in front of Jaws with a curry.

Let the inspiration flow.

 

[The Scribbling Man]

Tagline ideas:

"Silence is deadly" 

"Underwater, no one can hear you scream" 

"In classic B-movies, everyone can hear you scream"

"Dun-dun....Dun-dun.....Dun-dun-dun-dun-dundundundundundundun!"

"We're going to need a bigger budget" 


Thoughts?

 

[Sinbad]

I like the budget one more than  the scream ones, while clever they make me think more of Alien than Jaws.

 

[The Scribbling Man]

^^^ Fair noodles.

Started working on a trailer. As much as footage will allow, I'd like to do something that mirrors the original teaser for Jaws:

I might try and do my own voice over. Could be terrible, or could work well - we'll see!

 

[DigModiFicaTion]

Started working on a trailer. As much as footage will allow, I'd like to do something that mirrors the original teaser for Jaws:

I might try and do my own voice over. Could be terrible, or could work well - we'll see!

Wait, isn't this a silent edition?  [img=20x20]https://images.emojiterra.com/google/android-oreo/512px/1f914.png[/img]

 

[The Scribbling Man]

Wait, isn't this a silent edition?  [img=20x20]https://images.emojiterra.com/google/android-oreo/512px/1f914.png[/img]

Yes it is - maybe a voice over wouldn't be appropriate then? I kind of just wanted to do a throwback to the original Jaws promo. 

Silent Movie trailers probably aren't really a thing, but I wanted to try and do one all the same...

 

[The Scribbling Man]

How's this?

Added a custom "FE" rating to the end as well. Not something I'm familiar with doing, so there's probably room for improvement.

I didn't know the font for fanedit.org, so I just picked one that looked decent. If anyone happens to know the correct one then I'll change it.

 

[DigModiFicaTion]

Awesome Job! You nailed the feeling in aasilent kind of way I wonder if not showing the whole creature would be more suspenseful? I also really like the "Source Ownership Required" on the rating screen.

 

[The Scribbling Man]

Awesome Job! You nailed the feeling in aasilent kind of way I wonder if not showing the whole creature would be more suspenseful? I also really like the "Source Ownership Required" on the rating screen.

Yeah, my preference was to not have the creature shown, but I was struggling for lack of footage. I'll see if I can have another go though.

Edit: are there any specific shots you'd recommend removing?

 

[DigModiFicaTion]

Edit: are there any specific shots you'd recommend removing?

0:26 & 0:37 I wonder if you could get away with a cropped shot that doesn't show the full creature at 0:37?  Does the poster allow for you to zoom out a bit when you do the pan up on the hand? There seems to be a slight difference in contrast between the hand and the swimmer that sticks out during the pan up of the poster. This last part is just nitpicking though. I do love the huge "GILLS" text.

 

[The Scribbling Man]

 I wonder if you could get away with a cropped shot that doesn't show the full creature at 0:37? 

As in just show the hand? I'll have a go. 

Does the poster allow for you to zoom out a bit when you do the pan up on the hand? There seems to be a slight difference in contrast between the hand and the swimmer that sticks out during the pan up of the poster. 

I think that's just how the poster looks. I don't know if I can zoom out anymore, because then the image will include the criterion banner and FE logo. I assumed that would look a bit odd, but it could be fine.

 

[theryaney]

I think that's just how the poster looks. I don't know if I can zoom out anymore, because then the image will include the criterion banner and FE logo. I assumed that would look a bit odd, but it could be fine.

Perhaps this would help?

 

[The Scribbling Man]

Most definitely! Thanks, Theryaney

 

[The Scribbling Man]

How's this, @"DigModiFicaTion" ?

Thanks for the feedback btw. I like things to be the best they can be, and helpful peeps like you make that achievable 

 

[DigModiFicaTion]

I like how you hid the creature to show it, but not totally reveal it. I'd personally probably be a little more coy
The poster part felt a little off this time around. I liked how the original panned up along his arm to reveal it going after the swimmer like in the Jaws trailer. Perhaps zoom out a bit to begin with and then pan up. The zoom in on the text revealed some pretty jagged lines on the text. Perhaps just a fade out?
The cropped shots of his hand right before the "GILLS" is great!

 

[Sinbad]

Fab trailer Scrib! Love the zooming in/out on the poster, very effective with the score 

 

[The Scribbling Man]

I like how you hid the creature to show it, but not totally reveal it. I'd personally probably be a little more coy

Coy how?  

The Jaws trailer doesn't show the shark at all and is almost entirely POV. It would be my preference to mimic that, but that isn't possible, sadly. I'm not sure what other footage I can use that will lend itself to subtlety without just showing the woman swimming above water all the time (which I find a bit dull). The underwater shots are at least a bit more sinister. Subtlety is hard when using footage from an unsubtle film!  

The poster part felt a little off this time around. I liked how the original panned up along his arm to reveal it going after the swimmer like in the Jaws trailer. Perhaps zoom out a bit to begin with and then pan up. 

Okey doke. I can make it more like the first one. I just thought I'd try making use of the scope of the image theryaney provided.

The zoom in on the text revealed some pretty jagged lines on the text. Perhaps just a fade out?

I liked the idea of having it zoom in on the word "Jaws" before fading to white, but maybe that won't work

The cropped shots of his hand right before the "GILLS" is great!

Thank you 

Fab trailer Scrib! Love the zooming in/out on the poster, very effective with the score 

Thanks! It's a great soundtrack 

 

[DigModiFicaTion]

Perhaps you could use some footage from the Jaws trailer itself?

All editors shall read, but not be expected to accept, the feedback of others.

• Amendment A- All editors should just do what they feel is best for their edits.

The trailer does look great and are generally the hardest part of editing, to me. I just like your editing and wanted to say that I was somehow connected with the great Scribbler

 

[The Scribbling Man]

Perhaps you could use some footage from the Jaws trailer itself?

That's a good idea. 

I'm away now till the 26th, so I can't return to it till then. But a version 3 will surface, I assure you. 

The trailer does look great and are generally the hardest part of editing, to me. 

They are hard, aren't they? They're a lot of fun though - and worth refining, IMO. Normal trailers are meant to make you interested in the film, but I feel fanedit trailers are a bit different in that they are more a window into the editors style and ability. If a trailer is well done, then it shows the viewer that the edit will be worth thier time and of a similar, if not higher, standard to what they're seeing. Therefore, I feel its worth spending the time on it  

I just like your editing and wanted to say that I was somehow connected with the great Scribbler 

Darn it, Dig. You say such nice things! You forced me to modify your reputation.

 

[theryaney]

Also, I made a modification, the text was at the wrong place.

The zoom in on the text revealed some pretty jagged lines on the text. Perhaps just a fade out?

I liked the idea of having it zoom in on the word "Jaws" before fading to white, but maybe that won't work 

How about you make your own text in your editor, not with the picture? In that sense, it won't be aliased.