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Sinbad said:Tweaked opening, had some feedback on this thats its quite jarring when the kill bill titles kick in, I kinda wanted it to startle the viewer a bit, more feedback appreciated or alternate approach. I dont wanna change the silohouette thing though..
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The following is feedback from me, is my opinion, and is not intended to hurt feelings or praise or troll, but to provide critique for what I think doesn't work.
- The audio edit (from the "my baby shot me down" song to whatever the new song is) works, IMO.
- The cartoon filter effect doesn't look very good. Even in thumbnail form it's visibly pixellated. I get what you're going for but it doesn't work. Just looks like a stock cartoon filter that comes with any editing program. If I were watching something and I saw it use a filter like that, I wouldn't finish watching, fan edit or otherwise. I think you can achieve an acceptable effect without using such an extreme filter.
- The scrolling text looks low resolution, you might want to create a very high resolution PNG image file and scroll that instead of what I assume is text generated in your editing program. Also, I'd keep it one solid color, the red border doesn't look very professional and the yellow doesn't need it.
- I don't think the timing is quite right with your stamp graphic, I'd place it at the end of the music and let it sit over the fade to black.
- The voiceover sounds too compressed, like you're laying a low bitrate mp3 onto the movie's sound. Not sure if you tried to use Noise Reduction to remove music or if you had to use a compressed source for some other reason.
- There's a weird audio glitch at 1:00 after the voiceover that can be fixed with a fade-in.
- The reversed shot works fine. As Throw said, the smoke doesn't cause problems.