The Gill-man: Silent Jaws Edition

This is an alternate, "silent" version of my Gill-man edit, mixed with John Williams "Jaws" score. 

After finishing the Gillman edit, I wanted to experiment a bit and do something more liberal with the film. I love the style of silent movies and after seeing TMBTM's silent edit of The Force Awakens, I felt inspired to go down that same route. Due to the similarities between the two films (CFTBL & Jaws) and the music, I thought that the Jaws soundtrack would be an appropriate choice.

This was originally intended as an extra for the Gill-man DVD, which I'm still working on... But due to the amount of work I've put in so far, I feel like it deserves to be a fan edit in its own right. When the DVD is eventually put together, it will house both versions of the film, but I'd also like both edits to be available separately and have their own spot on IFDB (I assume this is ok?).

As much as I love silent films, I've never made one before... So I'm not entirely sure if I'm doing it "right" or not... I've decided to put up everything I've done so far on Vimeo so as to gather feedback sooner rather than later.

It's been a while since I've worked on it, but I was just reviewing it today. It's only now that I've uploaded it that I can see some things that will need tweaking  (Eg. Title cards being cut off at the sides). 

Main changes:
Any feedback or thoughts are greatly appreciated!

That's shaping up brilliantly, use of the Jaws score is spot on!  I really like the opening sequence and the font used for dialogue is a very good fit imo.  Looking forward to the finished edit. What are we looking at runtime wise about 25-30 mins? Its actually gave me an idea for another edit, *toddles off to Sinbad Ideas thread

Sinbad said:

 What are we looking at runtime wise about 25-30 mins?

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Yeah, probably. Not because I'm aiming for it, but I think it'll naturally end up being around that length due to the trims to the dialogue. I'd like to avoid it being shorter than that if possible.

here's version 1 of the cover

Thanks, @"jswert123456" ! Looks good  

I'm wondering if you'd be willing to do a version that draws attention to the "silent" and "Jaws" aspects? 

I'm thinking you could possibly either have a faint overlay of the Jaws poster showing through by messing around with the opacity, or have a tear effect going across the poster showing half Gill-man poster and half Jaws. 

What do you think?

It would also be great if you could swap the font sizes so that "Gill-man: Silent Jaws Edition" text is larger than "Creature from the black lagoon". Maybe have it say something like:

I’ll see what I can do

Looking good. I did notice some of the longer text seamed to be cutoff by the aspect ratio when they are in the institute. 

It would be fun to use the mashup graphic from this shirt for your poster art.

DigModiFicaTion said:

Looking good. I did notice some of the longer text seamed to be cutoff by the aspect ratio when they are in the institute. 

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I actually realised today that I rendered and uploaded an older version of the edit... I've done some more work on it today anyway, so those things should be fixed. Thanks for the feedback  

It would be fun to use the mashup graphic from this shirt for your poster art.

And some more neat art if you are interested. ​

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Yeahhhhh, that would be well cool. I think it's ultimately @"jswert123456" 's decision though since he's decided to take the job on.

jswert123456 said:

here's version 1 of the cover

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Some overlayed vignetting could be cool for the front and back images, something like this:

Then again maybe not, who knows. Maybe a grungy home movie style font for the title, maybe very little text on the back, just a short blurb and some info and that's it. Looks great!

Really looking forward to wherever this cover is going, same with the edit! You guys have my attention.

tiny practice photo- color


b&w version

silent jaws- version 2
still need to tweak the text sizes.

The Scribbling Man said:

Any feedback or thoughts are greatly appreciated!

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You spelled your name wrong: 'The Sciblling Man presents"...
This happened to me a couple of times too 

I like the style of the text cards a lot.

TMBTM said:

You spelled your name wrong: 'The Sciblling Man presents"...

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What are you talking about? I know how to spell my own name... That's me - I'm the scibibblin man!

silent jaws- color version

color version- modified a little

@"jswert123456" 

Thanks, jswert123456

Do you think you could have a go at using the Jaws font? 

I had a quick Google and you can get it for free here:

https://www.dafont.com/amity-jack.font

Maybe try it just on "The Gill-Man" or "Silent Jaws Edition", see what works best. 

I think that if you keep "The Gill-Man" font it would be good to use the same green as you've used for "Creature From The Black Lagoon" as it'll stand out a bit more. 

Also, your second colour version looks better - did you clean up the white at the top?

Thanks again.

Edit: I've just noticed that your missing an "L" on "Gill-man" - just so you're aware.

yes i cleaned up the white at the top.
i forgot to increase the brightness on the "gil-man"
thats why it looks different, i've had comments in past about using different fonts.
it would look odd only have a certain font for few words and everything else being different font
i have already made alot of changes.

i will do another color and b& w version
once all the final details and edit is done.

Having to discipline myself. It's so tempting to just go gunho and make the actors say whatever the hell I want.