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Maybe it stood out to me because I was listening on headphones?
Exactly! I think "defeated" is a great description. My feeling of his arc up to this point is that he could easily just feel worthless and incapable... certainty of failure is reason enough not to try. It's just about 2 seconds where he looks genuinely afraid and cowardly and it's OTT for me. By simply making him decide not to try because he knows he'll lose, it has great resonance with his final stand with Bran, where he knows he'll lose but he tries anyway. He gets a full arc.
You did indeed, much appreciated! I very much appreciated that it ain't as easy to kill a dragon in this, especially when it's clearly a trap. Euron getting his comeuppance for being a cocky over-reacher is very satisfying here.
Yeah, could work
I know you're not keen on the war of the groin hits, but maybe just one big one from Theon would work?
So the issue is that we've never seen anything like the NK sending visions to people. I think it also wouldn't be clear what it means...a warning? A taunt? I like the idea that he wants Jon up there to lure Dany up there to get a dragon, cool. But I don't think him sending visions will work. Bran maybe? There's something like a precedent there. A line of V.O. from Bran like "Danaerys! They're in danger!" paired with a vision of Jon and Jorah surrounded would be sufficient cause to get her to jump on a dragon. But I'd also be careful of the timing. The current vision looks like it occurs when she touches the throne...it's misleading in terms of causality.
I mostly like it, I'd just trim a couple sentences. For reaction shots, you can go back to the old Cannon Films/Corman Studios tried-and-true method: flip the frame. They reused shots in movies all the time, just by flipping it so the guy is facing right instead of left now. lol You can also probably get away with using a few reactions trimmed from other seasons, for most characters anyway.
I suspected that might be the reasoning. I had the same reaction with both him and Dany on the dragon when I first watched the original season. But it's not that hard to get around, it just has to be seeded. We last saw him patrolling up there North of the wall, so it makes sense he's in the area. You just take about 2-3 seconds of footage of him galloping through snow, zoomed in if necessary to obscure who's on the horse. You cut to that several times in the previous episode and beginning of this episode, so it looks like somebody could be coming for Jon and Co. but we don't know if it's friend or foe. Maybe when we see the NK on the hill with his leiutenants, people assume it was him. But then when they leave and Jon is freezing, finally BenJen bursts onto the scene. Voila. Now it's not deus ex machina, it's payoff.
Would it work to bump the dragon ride trial to right before they march into Winterfell? Or even to an earlier episode? The whole sequence (like the romantic waterfall kiss, etc) doesn't need to be used, just the part where he first tries to get on a dragon and flies a bit awkwardly. The rest can be saved for later use. I think it just needs to be established that Jon has been on a dragon before Winterfell...particularly as this is part of why he so easily accepts that Ned Stark was lying to him and he's a Targareyon...he knows it's true because he's the only other person the dragons have let ride them.
Okay that makes sense, E10 is a lot better! It's just the scenes in the castle in the first 15 min of E11. I saw several other reviews mention blurriness or a lack of clarity in dark sections, and I wonder if this is what they were referring to also? The scenes are all lit differently, so maybe breaking out that section and processing it separately would be helpful.
I know what you mean. I think the appearance of the text is pretty important. If it has a professional looking font and can pass for something you'd see in an '80s film, I think that would work. But with cheesy text placement, I know it can absolutely scream "fanedit!" I was imagining something like the classic "Where Are They Now?" style epilogue from Animal House.....
....and when I searched for that, I found somebody had already made one for Game of Thrones! Okay, this is done just as a joke, but it does give you the gist. Also, it's pretty damn funny!
Yeah, no worries, totally understandable! Already a great job on this. I think you definitely sorted out the key restructuring, and the invention of the messages/warging from Bran make great connective tissue. It's already a very impressive edit.
