Hi, Katie! Sorry it took me so long to get back to you.
First of all, the sound is
much better. I didn't have any trouble hearing anything.
It did seem like there was a difference in sound levels during the couple of times that you switched to scenes from
A New Hope and
Dark Redemption. The ANH stuff was noticeably quieter than the other footage (but still audible). If you ever do another pass, you might want to play around with that a bit more for better balance.
But narratively and visually speaking, the flow between the added scenes and the original ones is great, and your use of John Williams music is very effective.
Great job! I look forward to future efforts from you.