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Chasing Moonlight:
Effective storytelling here, capturing just one player, one dream, from "Field Of Dreams."
Story here is of Archibald (Archie) Graham who barely had the whisper of a chance.
The edit does not waste time, presents the premise, then jumps back to Iowa.
Time constraints are telling in this edit. Other character's narratives surface without resolution.
Kinsalla's motivation, for example, is not explained, nor is the cornfield.
As expected, Adabisi's editing is excellent, and he has done well with his material.
https://ifdb.fanedit.org/chasing-moonlight/discussions/10438/
Effective storytelling here, capturing just one player, one dream, from "Field Of Dreams."
Story here is of Archibald (Archie) Graham who barely had the whisper of a chance.
The edit does not waste time, presents the premise, then jumps back to Iowa.
Time constraints are telling in this edit. Other character's narratives surface without resolution.
Kinsalla's motivation, for example, is not explained, nor is the cornfield.
As expected, Adabisi's editing is excellent, and he has done well with his material.
https://ifdb.fanedit.org/chasing-moonlight/discussions/10438/