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Thanks, some great ideas here. My primary concern there would be losing what I currently have set up. I have thor on the left closing his eyes, then I follow with Jane on the right who then looks to the left to the empty space where Thor was.I like the idea of aether causing the cancer but it could be told much more simply. The Kuleshov Effect.
You start with a flashback montage right? Then it cuts to Jane getting her scan. Instead of ending the montage on Thor peacefully contemplating then going to the scan, end on shots of Jane being taken over by Aether from Thor 2 as part of the montage, with an echoey scream sound or something unsettling sounding, with reverb that continues into the shot of her getting the scan.
You could even maybe replace the baby Thor shots with the quiet contemplation shot and start with that, as if the montage represents his memories or something. This would give space for Jane shots at the end and keep your timing from the beginning while getting rid of the baby. Two birds, one rearrange.
I really like the idea of having the aether accentuated like that, leading into Janes MRI shot... but that loses the focus on the love between them. Also, that intro song was meant to accentuate the accumulation of events contributing to Thor's melancholy. The Aether sequence could certainly have a place in there... perhaps it could be carried over in some other way?