I've made a small change to the opening of the edit. Originally, after the prologue the story would go back to Old Bilbo, who would then start writing the 'In a hole in the ground...', then go to the good morning sequence. I have now changed it so that after the prologue we cut straight to young Bilbo at the market, then transitioning to the good morning scene. I felt it was a little redundant to cut to Old Bilbo after the prologue only to cut back to Young Bilbo only a minute later.
The transition can be found here:
Feedback would be greatly appreciated