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Star Wars: The New Dawn (Episode I Rewrite)

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The New Dawn is my latest & last rewrite of The Phantom Menace. I wrote the first draft over a seven-month period, from December 2013 to June 2014, then chronically revised it thereafter until 2018.

TND is an original story, with very few elements directly lifted from TPM. It was written with the intent to preserve continuity with the original trilogy, so it doesn't spoil any of the OT's plot twists. While there are references and shout-outs to Expanded Universe material, I tried to write my story with the casual fan in mind to keep it accessible. That said, there are EU-derived lingo and species names in my script; I will provide links to the more unfamiliar terms so as not to leave any non-EU readers in the dark.

Finally, it should be noted that this isn't a conventional SW tale by any means. I don't subscribe to the moral absolutism of the OT, and my story is a repudiation of that worldview. This is in keeping with my own philosophies on life, but may alienate more purist fans.
 
TITLE CARD: A long time ago in a galaxy far, far away....

A vast sea of stars serves as the main backdrop for the main title, followed by a roll up, which crawls up into infinity.

STAR WARS

THE NEW DAWN

Cast into war, the inefficient Galactic Republic is no more. In its place now stands the Galactic Empire, a more formidable power for a less certain time.

Yet nefarious forces continue to plague the Galaxy. The MANDALORIAN DEATH WATCH — a fanatical branch of the enemy defeated in the First Clone War — has been orchestrating raids all along the Outer Rim.

In the wake of these attacks, the Jedi of Coruscant have assigned one of their knights to investigate and uncover the underlying plan of the Mandalorians....

PAN UP

To reveal the underside of the water planet designated Arkania Colony 382, its oceans alive with a preternatural cyan glow.

Suddenly the Radiant VII — a Consular-class cruiser — comes streaming past at high velocity, its trajectory taking it beneath the hulking blue ocean planet. Behind it, hot on its heels, is a pair of Jehavey'ir-type assault ships. The twin ships fire upon the smaller Imperial craft, unleashing a torrent of intense orange turbolaserfire. The Radiant VII reciprocates, firing green turbolaser beams at the Mandalorians.

INT. RADIANT VII/COCKPIT

CAPTAIN MAOI MADAKOR and LIEUTENANT ANTIDAR WILLIAMS, the two crew members of the Radiant VII currently manning the cockpit, struggle to simultaneously fend off the attacking assault ships while trying to coax more speed from the small ship's engines.

CAPT. MADAKOR: I can feel them breathing up my skirt, Lieutenant. Can't you coax more speed from the engines?

LT. WILLIAMS: Sublights are burning at maximum, Captain. Had I time, I could bypass the safety protocols, give us a boost ...

CAPT. MADAKOR: (sighs) But time's a commodity we're running short on. (beat) How long 'til we can make the jump to lhyt-speed?

LT. WILLIAMS: The navicomp will have the coordinates in five minutes.

EXT. SPACE — AC-382

The Radiant VII's turbolaserfire strikes each of the assault ships, but each blast is effortlessly repelled by the larger crafts' deflector shields without leaving the slightest damage. Moving in like foreboding birds of prey, the Mandalorian ships unleash salvoes of orange turbolaserfire upon the space cruiser. The energized beams hit the cruiser's engines, obliterating one of the engines completely while instantly crippling the other.

INT. RADIANT VII/COCKPIT

The Radiant VII rattles violently, throwing the captain and the lieutenant forward in their seats.

INT. RADIANT VII/SALON POD

The interior of the salon pod is spacious, furnished with glamorous accoutrements. Inhabiting the pod, standing at the far end, is a tall NEAR-HUMAN WOMAN in voluminous crimson robes, SIX HUMAN WOMEN in close-fitting black uniforms, and a BLUE ASTROMECH 'DROID. Though each of the six black-garbed women are attractive in their own right, the beauty of the near-Human woman — with her long green-white hair, glittering porcelain-white skin, and radiant green-gold eyes — puts theirs to complete shame.

When the reverberations of the blast hits the pod, both the Human women and the 'droid rock on their foundations, threatening to topple over. The unearthly beautiful woman in red, however, her eyes closed and her hands clasped tight around the chain of a crystal medallion in prayer, remains perfectly still, unaffected by the turbulent vibrations.

EXT. SPACE — RADIANT VII

With the Radiant VII dead in the water, one of the assault ships easily slides up alongside the star cruiser. Like an insectile proboscis, a mechanized airlock extends out from the assault ship and clamps down on the outer hull of the cruiser.

INT. RADIANT VII/SALON POD

Hearing the groans and feeling the shudders of the ship as it is forcibly joined with the assault ship, the Human women look up towards the ceiling of the pod, gazing about as if in search of the source of the invading phenomena.

The near-Human woman — the beautiful priestess — brings her prayer to a close, securing the medallion around her neck.

PRIESTESS: (in Seboutrexi, subtitled) It's beginning....

One of the six Human women — a handsome woman with broad shoulders — takes a step away from her compatriots, approaching the priestess. This woman is ZIYAL D'UKAT, a Mistryl Shadow Guard and the team leader of the other five black-garbed women.

ZIYAL D’UKAT: (subtitled) We can't save you from the Mandalorians. There are only six of us against their entire crew.

PRIESTESS: (subtitled) You've done what you can, Ziyal D'ukat. Consider our bargain complete.

ZIYAL D’UKAT: (subtitled) I don't want to see you taken by them. You should escape while there's still time.

PRIESTESS: (faces D'ukat; subtitled) Where would I go? (waves arm to the planet sitting out beyond the pod's viewport) The planet out there is a world of empty oceans and we're light-years away from any inhabited system. (beat) There is nowhere to run to, nowhere to hide.

ZIYAL D’UKAT: (subtitled) You've never been a prisoner of Mandalorians — I have. I know from first-hand experience how they
treat captives in their custody. (beat) Please, reconsider.

PRIESTESS: (rests hand atop astromech; subtitled) This is the only course of action left open to me.

Realizing that she cannot deter the priestess from her decision, the Shadow Guard chooses to end the conversation.

PRIESTESS: (subtitled) Artoo, begin recording....

INT. RADIANT VII/COCKPIT

Madakor and Williams, having regained their senses, are busy undoing the restraints of their seats when a loud HISSING sound begins issuing through the sealed doors leading into the cockpit.

CAPT. MADAKOR: (twists seat around; stands up) They're coming through! Get ready.

Before she can finish her order, the cockpit doors disappear in a terrific explosion, the bulkheads of the cockpit lighting up with
bright yellow light and the air filling with acrid black smoke. As the two officers clear their blasters from their holsters, DOZENS
OF MANDALORIAN WARRIORS — each clad in the silver-and-blue armour of the Death Watch — come pouring in, cutting them down instantly with a hail of yellow blasterfire.

INT. RADIANT VII/UPPER DECK

Dropping in through a hole cut in the hull above, dozens upon dozens of Mandalorian Death Watchmen invade the small cruiser. Spreading out into all available areas of the ship, they cut down all crew members they come across with their blasters.

INT. RADIANT VII/'DROID HOLD

Inside the small, dark, cramped 'droid hold, a number of 'droids lay strewn about its confines, all either deactivated or in low-power modes. As the door to the hold slides open, casting bright light into its interior, one of these 'droids — a GOLDEN PROTOCOL 'DROID — immediately comes to life.

C-3PO: (erratic) Oh, my! Oh, goodness!

The golden 'droid rises to his feet, turning towards the humanoid silhouette filling the open doorway.

C-3PO: Oh, dear me — it isn't Donic Day already, is it?

The owner of the silhouette steps inside; it is a Death Watchman, a blaster rifle in his hands.

C-3PO: No, wait —!

The Mandalorian levels his blaster at Threepio and presses the trigger. A bolt of yellow plasma lances out, hits the 'droid's
shoulder plating, then ricochets back, hitting the Mandalorian square in the face and knocking him back and off his feet.

Cautious, Threepio takes a few steps toward the fallen warrior. Looking him over, he comes to the conclusion that the Mandalorian is stone dead.

C-3PO: This is no life for a protocol 'droid. I deserve far better than this.

Stepping past the dead Mandalorian, Threepio leaves the 'droid hold for the corridor beyond, eyes on the lookout for more Mandalorians.

INT. RADIANT VII/SALON POD

The priestess stands before Artoo, reciting her message.

Loud BANGS suddenly begin reverberating through the pod doors. The Mistryl Shadow Guards turn toward the source of the sounds, growing tense with anticipation as they unsheathe their vibroswords.

ZIYAL D’UKAT: (to priestess; subtitled) They're coming through!

Finishing her message, the priestess places a hand on Artoo and he stops recording.

With a terrible SQUEAL of grinding metal, the doors of the salon pod are forced open. As MANDALORIAN KNIGHTS step through, it is apparent that they differ in some respect to the other Death Watchmen aboard the ship; unlike their brethren, they wear blue-and-gray robes over their armour and wield wicked vibroswords in place of blasters.

Leaping forward, the six Mistryls engage the Mandalorian Knights, the vibrating blades of their technological swords clashing against those of the helmeted warriors. One of the Mistryls gains immediate advantage over her Mandalorian sparring partner, knocking the blade of his vibrosword away and delivering a blow which cuts through his neck and the chain of a platinum medallion surrounding it, nearly decapitating the warrior. Her victory is short lived, however, as another knight manages to evade her defenses and thrusts the point of his sword into her side, fatally running her through.

Turning away from Artoo, the priestess can do nothing but look on with horror as the Mandalorian Knights quickly begin overwhelming the formidable Shadow Guards, cutting them down with full brutality and no mercy.

INT. RADIANT VII/CORRIDOR

C-3PO makes his way along the corridor, eyeing the twisted bodies of the slaughtered crew members strewn about.

INT. RADIANT VII/SALON POD

The priestess sits against the far bulkhead of the pod, trembling in a ball under the transparisteel viewport, weeping with fear and disgust as Artoo stands beside her, trying to provide consolation the best he can. Ten Mandalorian Knights stand inside the pod, the bloody corpses of the Mistryl women and their own slain underfoot, their hidden eyes focused on the beautiful priestess cowering before them.

MANDALORIAN AIDE: (in Mando'a, subtitled) The Force Hound approaches!

Snapping to attention, the knights spread out, clearing the way for TWO MORE MANDALORIANS as they step inside the pod. While the first Mandalorian to enter is just another average blue-and-gray robed Mandalorian Knight, the SECOND is distinguished by the unique aquamarine robe he wears over his armour along with the trident symbol emblazoned over the visor of his helmet. He regards first the other Mandalorians then the dead before walking over to the priestess.

PRIESTESS: (looks up at Mandalorian, face twisted with hatred) Butcher! Murderer!

FORCE HOUND: I'm sorry, but it was an unfortunate necessity.

PRIESTESS: (enraged) This was a necessity‽ (beat) They were civilian crew members; they didn't have a chance against you! You could have spared them!

FORCE HOUND: I know you cannot understand. Someday, perhaps, you will. (offers her his hand) It is time to come with us.

Her face still contorted with hate, the priestess seizes the Mandalorian's hand in a hard grip. Fearing an attack, the other knights ready their weapons.

FORCE HOUND: (to other Mandalorians; in Mando'a, subtitled) Sheathe your blades. She won't harm me.

As the Force Hound pulls the priestess to her feet, Threepio steps into the open doorway.

C-3PO: (in Seboutrexi) Mistress, I —

Alerted to his presence, the Mandalorians spin around to face him.

C-3PO: Perhaps this isn't —

Before the golden 'droid can finish his statement, one of the knights lunges forward, ramming the blade of his vibrosword through Threepio's mechanical torso. Pulling the protocol 'droid in through the doorway, the Mandalorian Knight twists the blade then forces it upward, cutting out and through Threepio's shoulder. Uttering a senseless litany made of a combination of astromech mechanical language and Huttese, See-Threepio collapses to the deck, twitching violently as his damages flash with electricity.

FORCE HOUND: (annoyed; in Mando'a, subtitled) It was a protocol 'droid.

Without any further words, the Force Hound steps forward, dragging the priestess behind him as he leaves for the open doorway. As he steps out, the other Mandalorian Knights gather their dead then follow after him, leaving Artoo alone with the bodies of the slain Mistryls and the damaged form of See-Threepio.

EXT. SPACE — AC-382

Disengaging and retracting its extendible airlock, the Mandalorian assault ship releases the Radiant VII. As the small Consular-class cruiser drifts away, the engines both of the assault ship and its counterpart blaze to life and they rocket forward, casting their large shadows upon the derelict ship as they cruise over it. Before them, waiting in the distance like a stern parent, is the looming form of a Lictor-class dungeon ship.

Passing beyond the Radiant VII, a turbolaser cannon on one of the Jehavey'irs comes alive and swivels into position, opening fire upon the small ship. A single turbolaser blast hits the cruiser, blowing it apart into three separate pieces.

After the assault ships have rendezvoused with the dungeon ship and together made the jump into hyperspace, the remains of the Radiant VII begin falling toward AC-382. Entering the atmosphere, the fragments start to glow with intense white hot heat.

EXT. AC-382 — TERRAFORMING STATION C31 — NIGHT

A terraforming station rises up from the black ocean of the near-empty water planet. Large and conical in shape — with various red, orange, and white light fixtures aglow upon its surface — the station looks like an immense artificial island.

INT. TERRAFORMING STATION C31/GAME ROOM — NIGHT

Inside the small, cramped, sparsely-stocked, dim-lit game room, TWO INDIVIDUALS sit around a dejarik table. With one diminutive and the other a behemoth, they are clearly unrelated by blood. Nevertheless, their physical characteristics bear witness to the fact that they are both the results of hideous genetic experimentations. The tall one — MAC 73239 — is a Human/Wookiee hybrid, his entire body save for his fingers, chest, and upper face covered in thick black-brown fur, while the short one — NOR 747 — is a Chadra-Fan/Lannik hybrid, with the body of the former but the long, downturned ears of the latter. Both are currently engrossed with the holographic creatures that are playing across the illuminated game board.

As a holographic creature resembling three conjoined trees with six tentacles entangles a creature which resembles a legless spider with bat wings and pulls it down to its death, Nor begins hooting and hollering with joy, apparently the winner in this game. Mac, for his part, nonchalantly pours his mug of iridescent black-green ale on the dejarik board, causing the board to explode in a shower of sparks and smoke.

MAC 73239: Cheating bastard.

NOR 747: Hey!

INT. TERRAFORMING STATION C31/SURVEILLANCE ROOM — NIGHT

Inside the small, cramped, sparsely-stocked, dim-lit surveillance room, four beings — BLAI 7, GAR 79, CLA 75, and CHI 537 — sit before large banks of computer monitors, all of which display readings for various equipment in operation aboard the station or monitor various locations in and outside of the station itself. Like Mac and Nor, these four creatures are the results of renegade scientists' attempts to create hybrids between genetically unrelated species through gene splicing experiments.

The four beings, consumed with boredom, almost miss the bright streak of light which flashes across one of the monitors, coursing down from the black sky outside to splash down in the dark waters right outside the station.

GAR 79: Hey, what was that‽

CHI 537: What was what?

GAR 79: That thing that flashed across Screen #68!

CHI 537: I didn't see a blessed thing. Play it back.

Punching a command into his keyboard, Gar rewinds and replays the footage of the flaming trail hitting the black water.

BLAI 7: It's got heavy metal content. It could be a large meteorite.

CLA 75: Readings are all wrong for it to be a natural meteorite. It's clearly of artificial origin.

GAR 79: (sighs) Great — space junk. With our luck, it'll be some Type 0 radioactive bleeder. (to BLAI 7) Get Mac and Nor on it right away.

Without a word, Blai acknowledges with a single nod of his misshapen secondary head.

INT. TERRAFORMING STATION C31/GAME ROOM — NIGHT

Still caught up in their argument over the botched dejarik game, Mac and Nor fail to notice when BENN 4647 — a bizarre looking Devaronian/Twi'lek hybrid with mottled blue-and-bronze skin — opens the door and enters the murky room.

BENN 4647: (coughs into hand) Ahem....

Noticing Benn for the first time, Nor and Mac stop their riotous bickering and turn toward him.

BENN 4647: (cont'd) You're needed outside. Space junk 45.8 degrees off the starboard side of the sixteenth pylon.

NOR 747: Can't this wait? We're in a very important discussion right now!

BENN 4647: (shrugs) Do you want a repeat of what happened sixteen months ago with the ninth configurator?

Realizing that they have an important job to do and that it would be unwise to postpone doing it, the two companions sigh dejectedly and saunter off past the blue-bronze hybrid and out of the game room to attend to their duty.

EXT. OCEAN — NIGHT

A small submersible cuts through the inky black depths of AC-382's ocean waters. Looking like a large, gray eye sporting a pair of oversized crab-like claws, it is a comical sight to behold.

INT. SUBMERSIBLE/COCKPIT — NIGHT

MAC 73239: (into headset) We're approaching the junk.

EXT. OCEAN — NIGHT

As the submersible moves closer to its destination, a thick mechanical pole reaching up from the unseen ocean depths below and stretching to the unseen surface above fades into existence. There, wedged tight between the main body of the pole and a projected array of sensory filaments, is the large piece of space junk — the only large fragment of the Radiant VII — to survive its fall from the heavens to this planet of unending ocean.

INT. SUBMERSIBLE/COCKPIT — NIGHT

NOR 747: (to MAC 73239) What do you think it is?

MAC 73239: Beats me. Whatever it was, it's Hutt pizza now. (into headset) I'm readying the arms. It's in there, but it should slide out easy enough with a little TLC.

EXT. OCEAN PYLON 16 — NIGHT

The arms of the submersible come to life. Moving forward, they clamp onto projections on the fragment's surface. Once the grip is secure, the arms begin retracting. As they do, though, the fragment refuses to come with them, stubbornly glued in place between the main body of the pylon and the sensory filaments.

INT. SUBMERSIBLE/COCKPIT — NIGHT

MAC 73239: (licks lips) Sonuvablaster doesn't want to come loose.

NOR 747: (enters command into control panel) Powering up reserves.

EXT. OCEAN — PYLON 16 — NIGHT

With the extra juice flowing through its engines, the submersible manages to work the ship fragment out of its prison of metal. Once it's freed, though, the weight of the thing begins to pull the smaller form of the submersible down with it toward the ocean floor far below.

INT. SUBMERSIBLE/COCKPIT — NIGHT

MAC 73239: (panicked) More power, Nor! Hurry up! The backup arms, too! C'mon! C'mon!

EXT. OCEAN — PYLON 16 — NIGHT

Concealed hatches on either side of the submersible slide open and a pair of second arms — smaller and with somewhat more delicate instrumentation than that of their larger cousins — slide out. Clamping down on the fragment along with their larger twins, the backup arms provide enough leverage for the submersible to overpower the weight of the fragment and stop the descent to the dark depths below.

INT. SUBMERSIBLE/COCKPIT — NIGHT

MAC 73239: (sighs) I was getting worried there.

NOR 747: The damned thing's pretty heavy. Don't you think we should let the sucker sink and call it a day?

MAC 73239: And take the chance that it'll get tangled back up in the pylon again, deeper down? Hell with that! I'm bringing it topside where it can be disposed of properly!

EXT. OCEAN — PYLON 16 — NIGHT

With the ship's fragment balanced in its four arms like the Known Galaxy's strangest baby, the submersible begins making the slow ascent back to the surface.

EXT. TERRAFORMING STATION C31/SOUTH DOCK — NIGHT

The submersible and fragment now topside and secure, Mac and Nor climb up out of the hatch, climbing the rails which take them up onto the dock where other members of their crew are waiting to greet them. FU 247 — a large, burly hybrid between a Human and some unidentifiable cetaceous being — walks up to the two while six of her men run up to examine the fragment now docked with the submersible.

FU 247: What is that thing?

MAC 73239: That's up to you to find out and us not to give a damn about.

FU 247's crew goes to work cutting a hole in the side of the fragment as Mac and Nor disinterestedly leave to find a dry dejarik board. NORWE 4426 — an ugly, gaunt Pau'an/Zabrak hybrid — rubs his boney chin in hard thought as he examines the pitted surface of the fragment.

NORWE 4426: It looks like a near-intact segment of a Consular-class cruiser — the salon pod itself, to be precise.

FU 247: Good. Maybe there's something of value intact inside.

After a few moments the crew finishes cutting the hole through. WIN 3697 — a strangely attractive Amani/Ithorian hybrid — peers inside. Within the dark confines of the pod, Artoo's lights come to life, causing her to reer backward with startlement. Rocking back and forth in the shadow, the short astromech unit begins BLORTING and WARBLING frantically.

WIN 3697: (faces Fu) Fu, I don't know if it's valuable or not, but there's something inside I think you should take a look at....​
 
EXT. CORUSCANT — GALACTIC CITY — ENTERTAINMENT STREET — NIGHT

Entertainment Street — with its smoggy air, rundown buildings, flickering lights, and disreputable-looking characters — lies at the heart of the world-city's seedy underbelly, far from the well-maintained, gleaming chrome centres of civilization that serve as the planet's public face to the rest of the Empire.

A TALL WOMAN — her features hidden beneath the folds of a deep red, hooded cloak — makes her way along Entertainment Street, passing several alien lowlifes, panhandling 'droids, and upper class slummers along the way. Soon she comes to her destination: a grime-stained establishment with a dim blue neon sign identifying it mundanely as "XED'S CANTINA".

As she steps forward, a scantily clad prostitute standing beside the entrance — her body too heavily endowed to be natural — reaches out, stopping her with a touch on the shoulder.

PROSTITUTE: How's it hangin', babe? Keen on a little slap 'n' tickle?

HOODED WOMAN: (regards woman) I doubt you're my type.

PROSTITUTE: I'm everybody's type.

As she says those words, the exotically beautiful woman changes her shape; muscles, bones, skin and hair lengthening and contracting, she transforms into a scantily-clad man with a muscular physique and trim goatee.

HOODED WOMAN: Maybe another night.

With that the hooded woman steps past the shapeshifter, entering the cantina like a shadow merging with a greater darkness.

PROSTITUTE: (gives rude hand gesture) Your loss, girly-girl!

INT. XED'S CANTINA — NIGHT

The hooded woman enters the cantina. Looking about the dingy interior, she sees a number of clientele — all seedy and grungy like the people outside — lounging around, nursing drinks and talking in hushed tones at the bar or in booths. Silent, she moves forward across the room toward the bar, her cloak trailing behind her like flowing dark blood.

As she stops before the grimy bar counter, Xed — the large, unwashed Besalisk owner of this establishment — turns toward her, wiping a pair of dirty mugs with a pair of dirty rags in a pair of dirty hands.

HOODED WOMAN: I'm here to see Dep T'rot.

XED: Dep T'rot, Dep T'rot.... (spits brown phlegm into mug) Never heard o' no Dep T'rot.

The hooded woman reaches into her cloak. Pulling out some credits, she tosses them on the counter before the bartender.

XED: (scoops up credits) Now that I t'ink 'bout it, he might be out back. (beat) Ya know whatta knockout t'ose Rhuvian fizzes can be.

HOODED WOMAN: For him or for you?

XED: I make it a religion neva to sample my own juice, baby. (beat) Not while the sign's lit, anyways.

HOODED WOMAN: (turns to leave) Always a pleasure, Xed.

XED: Don't be a stranger, Tachi.

EXT. GALACTIC CITY — ENTERTAINMENT STREET — XED'S CANTINA — ALLEY — NIGHT

Exiting the cantina, the hooded woman makes her way around the building, slipping into the alley behind. As she makes her way down the dark alley, TWO SHAPES come out from the shadows behind her, blocking off the dim light coming in from the street. Spinning around, she finds herself face-to-face with a tall, gaunt Balosar and a squat, fat, mutant Yuzzum.

VISS UTHAR: Hey, baby — wanna have some deathsticks?

DENN JIIDET: Maybe wanna have my deathstick....

Without any further word, the two lowlifes unsheathe small vibroblades. Their eyes and grins alive with salacious intent, they begin approaching the hooded woman. She shrinks back, fear evident on her shadow-obscured face.

Just as they reach her, her expression shifts to one of hard determination and she explodes into action. Throwing out her leg,
she kicks Jiidet in his furry gut, sending the inordinately large Yuzzum crashing into an alley wall with a heavy WOOF of expelled air.

Ducking as Uthar slashes at her with his vibroblade, she reaches for her side and unclips a cylindrical metal rod. Gripping it hard, she springs back up and punches the Balosar in the face, using the metal weapon to reinforce her blow. Spitting teeth, Uthar goes down.

Just as the Balosar hits the pavement, though, Jiidet recovers and attacks, grabbing the woman by the hem of her dark red cloak. As he spins her around, the cloak comes loose and she goes sailing into a heap of trash, the metal cylinder flying from her grasp. Chucking with sinister glee, the Yuzzum retrieves his fallen vibroblade. Flipping and twisting it around his fingers, he charges the dazed woman. Just as he reaches her and pulls his knife back to deliver the killing blow, she jumps up onto her feet and springs into the air, somersaulting over Jiidet as his momentum sends him crashing into the pile of trash. Landing behind the sprawled-out Yuzzum, she cartwheels across the pavement toward the cylinder, sweeping it up in her hand as she passes over it. Springing back up onto her feet, she grips the cylinder with both hands as the Yuzzum climbs to his feet and charges, slashing his vibroblade through the air maniacally.

The woman presses a stud set into the side of the cylinder and a blade of yellow plasma erupts from it with a sharp SNAP-HISS. Startled by this dazzling weapon, the Yuzzum stops mid-slash, stumbling as his momentum carries him forward toward the glowing blade. Pivoting to her right, the woman throws her left leg out, knocking Jiidet backward onto the pavement with a high kick to the chin. Fully in control of the situation now, she strides forward, placing the tip of the blade under the Yuzzum's chin.

HOODED WOMAN: Perhaps you'd like to try my deathstick.

No longer obscured beneath the heavy red cloak, we can see that this woman is Human, twenty-eight years old, pretty, with shoulder-length ash blond hair and piercing gray eyes. Judging by the exotic weapon she wields and the loose charcoal coveralls and black boots, belt, and outer tunic she wears, she is a Jedi — a knight of the Coruscanti sect.

HOODED WOMAN: Get the hell out of here.

Removing the thrumming blade from Jiidet's hairy throat, the Jedi takes a step back. Wasting no time, the Yuzzum scrambles to his feet and takes off, leaving his unconscious accomplice behind.

DEP T'ROT: (in Kubazian, subtitled) Impressive, Siri. Very, very impressive.

With a sigh, SIRI TACHI deactivates her lightsaber. Clipping it back on her belt, she turns around, where Dep T'rot — a tall Kubaz — stands behind her, his dark black cloak helping to blend him into the alley shadows.

SIRI (HOODED WOMAN): So are you. I didn't even know you were back here.

DEP T'ROT: (subtitled) You can take the Kubaz out of the Jedi, but you can't take the Jedi out of the Kubaz. (beat) I have what you've come for.

Reaching under his dark cloak, the Kubaz pulls out a datacard. Retrieving her deep red cloak, Siri fastens the blood-red material
around her neck as she steps up to him.

SIRI: (takes card) What's on it?

DEP T'ROT: (subtitled) Read it.

Pulling out a datapad, Siri slips the datacard into it and calls up it's stored information.

SIRI: (reading) Consular-class cruiser Radiant VII carrying Zul Danann ... high priestess of the Meketrex ... attacked en-route to Vuldronaii, throneworld of the Sebouillia ... fragments of ship found by terraformers on AC-382, uninhabited water planet ... no survivors. (looks up at Dep T'rot) And you're sure Mandalorians were involved?

DEP T'ROT: (subtitled) It fits their M.O. Small, lightly-defended ship, attacked out in the Outer Rim far from any heavily populated world....

SIRI: (deactivates datapad) I'll check up on it.

Turning around, Siri begins making her way out of the alley.

DEP T'ROT: (subtitled) Aren't you forgetting something?

SIRI: (faces him) Don't worry. Your fee has already been deposited into your account.

DEP T'ROT: (subtitled) That isn't what I'm talking about.

SIRI: (rolls eyes) What are you talking about, then?

DEP T'ROT: (subtitled) Aren't you going to say "thank you"?

Her face freezes. She wasn't expecting him to say anything like that.

DEP T'ROT: (subtitled) Well?

SIRI: (stoney) Thank you....

No longer comfortable with the Kubaz, she hurries along on her way, leaving the black-clad ex-Jedi alone in the dark, dirty alley.

INT. NYAX/ZUL'S CELL

The near-Human Meketrex high priestess — ZUL DANANN — sits alone within the confines of a dark and dirty detention cell aboard the Mandalorian dungeon ship known as the Nyax. Dirty and disheveled, no longer the perfect picture of perfect beauty she was before, she sits hunched over the solid metal door of her cell.

ZUL (PRIESTESS): (enraged; in Seboutrexi, subtitled) Gods!

Bearing her teeth like an animal, the humiliated priestess balls her hand up into a fist and punches the door hard. Grimacing with the pain that comes as a result, she pulls away and turns her back to the door, fuming. After a few moments, she reaches into her robes and pulls out her medallion. Clasping it tight, she begins praying.

Before she can conclude her prayer, the loud, harsh sound of the locks of her cell door disengaging rings out through the cramped spaces of her cell. Spinning around, her eyes go wide with fear as the door slides open and a PAIR OF ARMOURED DEATH WATCHMEN enter.

MANDALORIAN #1: (to companion; in Mando'a) A pretty little thing, ain't she?

MANDALORIAN #2: (in Mando'a) I'll say.

Approaching Zul, crouching down in front of her, the second Mandalorian takes her hair in one gauntleted hand, feeling it. Petrified with terror, she begins trembling at his touch.

MANDALORIAN #2: (in Mando'a) Quite the prize, ain'tcha? A true green-haired sweetness. (leans in close) You look close to Human. You compatible with baseline? Ever made it with a real Man? Would you like to try?

Emerging from her fearful rigidity, she begins slapping at the Mandalorian, all in a fruitless attempt to ward him away.

MANDALORIAN #2: (laughs; in Mando'a) We'll find out after your date with the coffin!

His fist tightening around Zul's hair, the Mandalorian forcibly pulls her up by it.

INT. NYAX/CELL BLOCK

Laughing maniacally, the two Mandalorians drag the defenseless Meketrex priestess from her cell into the dank, moist corridor of the cell block. Resealing the cell door, they begin hauling her along the corridor.

Futilely trying to pull free of her tormentors, Zul SCREAMS. The cries merely reverberate along the nooks and crannies of the cell block, mixing with the tortured sounds of other prisoners imprisoned within the dungeon ship.​
 
EXT. SPACE — AC-382

As the twin blue-green suns of AC-382 dip behind their child planet, casting the side farthest away from them in darkness, a small arrowhead-shaped Delta 7 Aethersprite-class starfighter — painted silver-and-white with a ring-shaped hyperdrive apparatus affixed to its body — exits the realm of hyperspace. Detaching from its hyperdrive ring, the Jedi starfighter's sublight engines blaze to life, taking it on a downward course to the water planet below.

EXT. AC-382 — TERRAFORMING STATION C31/DOCKING PLATFORM — DAY

Opening the canopy of her landed starfighter, Siri lifts herself up and out of the craft, stepping out onto the platform. A heavy rainstorm rages all around the terraforming station, drenching everything and everyone left out in the open. She brings the hood of her red cloak up over her head as the canopy of her ship closes.

ARKANIAN OVERSEER: (O.S.) Lovely weather we're having, isn't it?

Turning toward the source of the voice, Siri spies an ARKANIAN FEMALE standing a ways away from her on the platform. Tall and slender, the Arkanian sports the long white hair, milky eyes, and four-fingered hands distinctive of her species; she is not a genetically engineered hybrid like the others manning the station.

SIRI: (approaches Arkanian) I take it storms like these are common on your planet.

ARKANIAN OVERSEER: This isn't my planet. (beat) But we have our fair share of sunny days. (gestures to station entrance) Please, come this way.

Regarding the aloof Arkanian with a raised eyebrow, the Jedi Knight follows her into Terraforming Station C31.

INT. TERRAFORMING STATION C31/CORRIDOR - DAY

As Siri and the Arkanian make their way along the antiseptic metal corridors of the station, the Jedi can't help but to notice all the strange hybrid creatures which make their way to-and-fro about them.

ARKANIAN OVERSEER: You've taken notice of our rather particular crew, haven't you?

SIRI: Yes, yes, I have. (beat) I don't claim to be an expert on xenobiology, but —

ARKANIAN OVERSEER: They are genetically engineered organisms, hybrids customized for ... specific functions.

SIRI: Warfare, you mean.

ARKANIAN OVERSEER: (smiles wryily) These specimens were rejected, deemed unfit for their tailored purpose. We could've had them exterminated, but we decided instead to put them to work on the outlying colonies.

SIRI: Ever obediant, never questioning. The perfect slave workforce.

ARKANIAN OVERSEER: (faces Siri) They're no more slaves than that R2 unit aboard your craft. (beat) Besides, since AC-382's appropriation by the Empire, they receive the wages they're due.

As they pass out of the corridor, a Human/Ranat janitor currently engaged in cleaning the floor stops to give Siri a short once-over. Once she has disappeared from view, he returns to his work.

INT. TERRAFORMING STATION C31/WALK-IN FREEZER — DAY

The door to a nearly empty, ice-encrusted walk-in freezer slides open, allowing Siri and the Arkanian overseer inside. Striding further into the freezer, Siri spots six Human-shaped bodies on the floor, each wrapped in plastic sheeting and laid out in neat rows.

ARKANIAN OVERSEER: These were all the cadavers we discovered aboard the pod. None of them appear to be Mandalorian.

SIRI: Mandalorians never abandon their dead.

Approaching one of the bodies, the Jedi bends low and reaches for it, unraveling the sheeting around its head to reveal the naked face and shoulders of Ziyal D’ukat herself. For one who died by violence, she looks surprisingly serene in death.

SIRI: (frowns) Where are her affects?

ARKANIAN OVERSEER: We removed them for inspection.

SIRI: You shouldn't have done that.

Rising to her full height, Siri turns away from the dead Mistryl to face the Arkanian.

SIRI: Where did you take them?

ARKANIAN OVERSEER: They have been taken to a storage room. Trust me, the belongings of each individual body have been placed in their own separate containers.

SIRI: I want to see them at once.

ARKANIAN OVERSEER: (nods) Of course.

Pressing a button on a panel in the wall, the door slides open, allowing the two women to exit the frozen chamber.

INT. TERRAFORMING STATION C31/STORAGE ROOM — DAY

The door to the storage room slides open and the Arkanian woman leads Siri inside. Throughout the room, strewn about the floor and in piles stacked to the ceiling, are various crates and storage containers holding various parts and supplies.

ARKANIAN OVERSEER: I'm the only one who has had access to this room since the artifacts were brought in. No one else has been in here.

SIRI: I assume you have security records to corroborate your story.

Replying silently with only a half-smile, the overseer takes Siri over to the far corner of the room, which has been cordoned off with red tape. There in a small pile — along with the deactivated forms of Artoo-Detoo and See-Threepio — are seven identically shaped-and-sized containers.

ARKANIAN OVERSEER: You'll find everything is in its place. Nothing has been misplaced or lost.

SIRI: (points at 'droids) The ship's only known survivors, I presume?

ARKANIAN OVERSEER: After a fashion. The astromech is in prime condition; it has merely been powered down. The protocol 'droid, on the other hand, has been critically damaged, possibly in an altercation with the Mandalorians. (beat) We thought of having it shipped away for repairs, but then we figured it is evidence and you wouldn't want us tampering with it....

SIRI: (looks containers over) There were only six bodies stored in the freezer; there are seven containers here.

ARKANIAN OVERSEER: Naturally, not all the items we found could be correlated with an individual body, so we set them apart. (beat) The container housing them has been clearly marked with a "7".

Locating the container marked with the digit for "7", Siri grabs hold of it and pulls it away from the others. Carrying it off, she lays it down atop the surface of a large, table-sized crate. Breaking the seal, she opens the container and begins going through its contents, laying each and every artifact out on top of the crate after she finishes examining it. Soon she stops, brow furrowing at a particular object lying at the bottom of the container: a platinum medallion on a broken chain.

ARKANIAN OVERSEER: (frowns) Is something the matter?

Reaching into the container, Siri pulls out the medallion. Placing it in her hand so the surface bearing a small, ice-blue crystal in its centre faces upward, she grips it tight then passes her other hand slowly over it. From the heart of the crystal, a small three-dimensional holographic projection of a planet flashes into existence. With concentration, Siri makes the planet change shape, transforming it into another planet or moon. After eight more such transformations, each into a different world, the medallion returns to the projection of the first it started with.

ARKANIAN OVERSEER: It's some sort of holoprojector.

SIRI: (shakes head) Oh, no, it's not just a holoprojector — not at all.

Relaxing her concentration, Siri allows the crystal at the heart of the medallion to go dead, the projected planet winking out of existence.

INT. CORUSCANT — JEDI TEMPLE/COUNCIL CHAMBERS — TWILIGHT

Within a stately room located at the apex of the Jedi Temple on Coruscant, twelve Jedi masters — MACE WINDU; MICAH GIIETT; KI-ADI-MUNDI; PLO KOON; SAESEE TIIN; EVEN PIELL; YARAEL POOF; OPPO RANCISIS; YADDLE; EETH KOTH; ADI GALLIA; and DEPA BILLABA — sit in seats arranged about in a semi-circular formation. Though dressed in uniforms nearly identical to Siri's, they also sport large, heavy black cloaks indicative of Jedi masters of the Coruscanti Order.

A holographic projection of Siri rises from the floor within the council's semi-circle, standing at attention before the masters. Due
to the great distance separating Coruscant and AC-382, the hologram cannot exist in high resolution. As such it is completely monochromatic, with pronounced scanlines, flickering constantly as the reception verges on failure.

SIRI: Greetings, Masters. (to Adi Gallia) Mistress.

ADI GALLIA: (smiles) Hello, Siri.

MACE WINDU: (stern) We take it you've found something of importance?

SIRI: (nods) T'rot's information was correct; the Mandalorians attacked and destroyed a Consular-class cruiser in orbit above Arkania Colony 382. Several Mandalorian artifacts survived intact aboard the ship's salon pod when it fell to the planet and was
recovered by the crew of Terraforming Station C31.

YADDLE: Able were you to uncover the motivations behind the attack?

SIRI: No, but I think I know who was behind it and where they'll strike next.

Reaching into her tunic, Siri withdraws the platinum medallion and holds it out for the Jedi masters to look upon.

MICAH GIIETT: Isn't that —?

KI-ADI-MUNDI: It's a Jedi meditation device!

SIRI: (nods) An initiate's tool for helping to focus one's concentration in the Force — a child's plaything.

MACE WINDU: Are you sure it belonged to the Mandalorians?

In response, Siri turns the medallion over. There, stamped into the back, is the symbol of the Mandalorian Death Watch.

SIRI: This isn't a keepsake, a spoil of war. It was manufactured by the Death Watch itself.

ADI GALLIA: This can only mean one thing.

EVEN PIELL: A fallen Jedi has joined the ranks of the Death Watch.

OPPO RANCISIS: More than that; they're training Mandalorians to use the Force.

MACE WINDU: You said you knew where they'll strike next?

SIRI: (nods) When activated, the meditation device projects holographic images of ten worlds — nine of which have each been
attacked by the Mandalorians, each in the order they're displayed on the device.

Bringing up the medallion, Siri activates it. Cycling through the worlds, she comes to the ninth: the water planet AC-382 itself.

SIRI: This is AC-382, the last planet we know the Mandalorians staged an attack around.

Siri switches to the next and last world encoded into the meditation device: a barren desert planet with no apparent surface water.

SIRI: This is the next and final world on the list: a planet located on the outskirts of Hutt Space — Tatooine.​
 
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