Neglify said:Sweet cover. Only suggestion I have is change "After a 1000 years..." to either "After a thousand years..." or "After 1000 years..."
Neglify said:Sweet cover. Only suggestion I have is change "After a 1000 years..." to either "After a thousand years..." or "After 1000 years..."
bionicbob said:Final version:
TM2YC said:Or "1000 Generations". It means the same thing... apparently.
Vultural said:He is one 100% percent correct.
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TV's Frink said:I see what you did there, if you meant to do it.
NewSpock said:How about this for a synopsis?
"After a 1000 years the sith have returned. Will the jedi see through the cloud of the dark force before it consumes them?
Follow Anakin Skywalker on his path to become the greatest Jedi and having to make a choice that will forever decide his destiny."
After a thousand years the Sith have returned. Will the Jedi see through the Dark Side's machinations, or will it consume them? Follow Anakin Skywalker on this path to become the greatest Jedi as he is forced to make a choice that will forever decide his destiny.
Kal-El said:BOB, cover is spot on. Forget what I said
Here's what I suggest:
Personally I feel it reads better (and looks better too) if you use the full pronunciation of the years and not the numbers. But that's just personal preference and NOOOOO ONE should take this as written word. Also Sith/Jedi is capitalised but I'm guessing you knew that and it was just a typo since you did capitalize Jedi the second time Also it's the Dark Side of the Force and not the Dark Force This isn't Dark Force Rising LMAO sorry and finally see through the cloud doesn't sound right, but I think I know what you're trying to say. It's more in the sense of Yoda's statement "The dark side clouds everything. Impossible to see the future is." Right?
NewSpock said:I think you are right: "A thousand years" looks better, and " Follow Anakin Skywalker on this path to become the greatest Jedi as he is forced to make a choice that will forever decide his destiny. " sounds better.
And you are right, "dark side" is more to the point.
But I like the word "cloud" in there, so my preferred version would be:
"After a thousand years the Sith have returned. Will the Jedi see through the cloud of the dark side before it consumes them? Follow Anakin Skywalker on his path to become the greatest Jedi as he is forced to make a choice that will forever decide his destiny."
Kal-El said:
Will the Jedi see through the Dark Side's shroud before it consumes them?
Kal-El said:Will the Jedi see through the Dark Side's shroud before it consumes them?