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Source Code: Version 1.2

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File Size: 1.28 GB
Source: PAL DVD
Other Sources: Fanedit Templates, Source Code (Orig. Motion Picture ST)
Original Runtime: 89
Fanedit Runtime: 84
Time Cut: 5

Synopsis:

The original “Source Code” is a good film, but is let down by a shallow and a poorly executed twist ending. “Version 1.2” removes the last minute “life” theme and shifts the emphasis to Captain Colter Stevens receiving dignity and closure before embracing his fate. A handful of other small changes have also been made (see cutlist). 
 
Intention: 

I initially went in with the sole aim of ending the movie 5 minutes earlier, so as to rid it of the awful “Love Conquers Plot Holes” ending. But after trying it, it just felt too abrupt. Therefore I decided to take a new approach and alter the narrative during the phone call scene in order to use that footage and provide some finality to the closing shots. This is also meant that I had to rescore parts of these scenes in order to cover up some unwanted sound effects (no clean centre channel).
 

The Gist:
·        Applied minor colour balance filter
·        Removed “Love Conquers Plot Holes” Ending.
·        Rearranged scenes to create new ending narrative.
·        Shifted the emphasis from “life” to giving Stevens dignity and closure.
·        A handful of other, minor cuts

Full Cutlist:
·        Applied colour balance filter to whole film, reducing overly dominant colours and increasing brightness slightly
·        Added fanedit.org templates
·        Added Scribbling Man logo
·        Added custom title
·        Tightened first train explosion, also:
·        Removed naff CG shot of train crashing
·        Tightened second train explosion
·        Trimmed second post-explosion blackout
·        Edited all flashes to exclude any "future" memories (and in one case created a new one)
·        Trimmed Stevens getting hit by train
·        Removed memory flash completely (I.e. Train hits - Stevens Jolts awake)
·        Removed "Bing" product placement when Stevens is using the woman's phone
·        Cut “I knew he was a keeper”
·        Re-edited and rescored phonecall scene. It’s now ambiguous who Stevens calls, and whether he gets through.
·        Cut some of Goodwins more bizarre expressions when looking at Stevens body.
·        Trimmed Max’s joke so we hear as little of it as possible without it being jarring. It’s a bad joke.
·        Cut “Look” “What?” “All this life…” – somewhat poorly placed alongside Max’s sex joke. 
·        Re-edited and rescored film during when everyone freezes to include Stevens phonecall to his dad as a partial voice over. Changed closing shots to the infinite kiss followed by Stevens looking peaceful.
·        Rescored end credits.
 

Special Thanks

·        To everyone who provided feedback and encouragement (and a particular shout out to Sinbad, who also suggested the title)
·        To my sister, for designing poster art
·        To my OTHER sister, for bringing my attention to the memory flashes
·        To ThrowgnCpr for technical assistance and advice on colour correction
·        To my brother, whose idea it was to utilise the phone call scene
·        To anyone else I’ve forgotten…




I've had this idea at the back of my mind ever since I saw the film at the cinema, and watching it again recently over Christmas got me thinking about it again. Therefore, since it's going to be a relatively "light" edit, I figure I may as well crack on while it's fresh in my mind.

Planned cut list:
  • Improve pacing during a couple of the train crash sequences.
  • Remove "I knew he was a keeper" line.
  • Cut Stevens texting Goodwin.
  • End film when Stevens is unplugged and everything freezes.
  • (Possibly) apply colour correction (the whole film has a very cold, bland, metallic look).
"Source Code: How It Should Have Ended" is a working title, so other suggestions are welcome.

I think the main issue will be making sure the film feels like it's ended. Although I've always felt that it should end when everything freezes, it still feels like there's a need for some kind of closure/epilogue. Obviously, the theatrical does have an epilogue, but within that it introduces a twist that makes absolutely no sense. So my fear is that by ending the film where "it should have ended", it will also inevitably feel quite abrupt. There's probably nothing I can do about it, but if anyone has any thoughts...
 

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The Scribbling Man said:
"Source Code: How It Should Have Ended" is a working title, so other suggestions are welcome.


Many people might consider your edit some interpretation of the HISHE series. I would suggest a different title, to avoid confusion.
 

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ThrowgnCpr said:
The Scribbling Man said:
"Source Code: How It Should Have Ended" is a working title, so other suggestions are welcome.


Many people might consider your edit some interpretation of the HISHE series. I would suggest a different title, to avoid confusion.

Good point. Thanks. Not sure what else to call it at this stage though.
 

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HIRSHE (How It Really Should Have Ended)

You could use some variant of a Hershey's kiss for your logo.
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Here's my quick attempt at the ending. The first minute is just for some context, then at around 1:10 I've retimed the music and slowed down some shots to help ease into the credits. I still think it might be a bit abrupt though. I sent the clip to my brother and he suggested having some kind of montage using earlier footage to sign things off, but I'm concerned that might be too cheesy.
Any thoughts?
 

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Nice job! just needs the mannequin challenge theme at the end. :) Might it be better fading slowly on that penultimate shot of Jake looking peaceful. A trick i use when i dont have many frames to work with in fairly still shots is to reverse the shot and add it on the end for some extra frames.
 

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How's this?
Wasn't sure about the music change, but I think the shot you suggested works much better.
 

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Yeah definitely dont change the music haha, yeah that's much more poignant, I like it :)
 

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Sinbad said:
Yeah definitely dont change the music haha, yeah that's much more poignant, I like it :)

Thanks! 

Have you seen the film before?
 

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Yes it been a few years since I saw it, got the bluray so I will check the edit out when it's done
. They ended up in some parallel universe where he had legs again didn't they? Typical tacked on happy Hollywood ending.
 

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Sinbad said:
Yes it been a few years since I saw it, got the bluray so I will check the edit out when it's done
. They ended up in some parallel universe where he had legs again didn't they? Typical tacked on happy Hollywood ending.

It's much worse than that, and makes very little sense. Here it is if you need a refresher:

 

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So I've made all the changes I wanted to make with this - it's just the colour correction that I'm tweaking. 

And also... The ending. I could leave it as it is, but I can't help but feel that it still needs something extra to help bring the film to an end. 

I'm wondering if I could maybe shift things around a bit and move some footage from this scene:
My thoughts are that earlier you would see him make a phone call, but it would be ambiguous as to who he called... Until the end, where you would hear the conversation as we pan over the frozen shots etc. Eventually ending with that shot of peaceful Jake. That way the film says "yup. He's dead", but THEN the last thing you're presented with is a flashback that says "but look - he's frozen in a beautiful moment, and he got closure with his dad."

Thoughts?
 

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Think that could really work, I'd leave out the lines where his dad goes on about the state of his body etc and make it as poignant/upbeat as possible.  Yes the orginal ending does undo all the good stuff that came before it doesn't it?
 

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Phonecall Part 1 (Who is he calling? Did he get through!?):

 

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Editing this scene is emotionally exhausting. I'm gonna start crying soon. 

Here's Part 2:

Looking at it now, I'm not sure how well this works. Might need to alter some of the imagery beneath the voice over as the frozen people I think are a bit random. Hopefully I'm on the right track though. 

I know you (Sinbad) suggested taking out the bit about his ashes (which makes sense), but I think that could be jarring and a little odd for Stevens not to ask him how he's doing.
 

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it does work pretty well, certainly better than the ending of the original film. What I like about the first version though is him infinitely kissing michelle monaghan in the source code
Then we see him at peace and the image of their kiss is fresh in the mind, this is definitely poignant but more downbeat than your other ending. Depends what you are going for I suppose.
 

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What is the source/workflow on the alternate footage? There is some frame blending occurring. It's not horrible, but noticeable:

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The source is a PAL dvd. I've just noticed that as well. It'll probably be due to the fact that I slowed down those shots slightly in order to aid in the timing. Guess I'll have to find another way around that.
 

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oh yes, slowing them down in your NLE would definitely cause that. 

After Effects is fantastic for slowing footage, as you can interpolate frames. I'm not sure if you have that at your disposal.  Otherwise, I would keep the framerate as is, and look into ways to recut it to fit your needs.
 
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